The story about me.
I went to Mountain in summer.
Happened first , There are many insects.
Next , It sucked the blood by a mosquito.
But , Landscape is very beautiful. It makes me happy.
Hi Masato, I'm glad you could enjoy the mountains. However, your story needs more steps and more time order words. Also, how did you change your thinking? Revise your story with more information.
A.1.Yes.
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A.3.Happened
A.4.What mean insect and suck?
Hi Masato, I'm glad you could enjoy the mountains. However, your story needs more steps and more time order words. Also, how did you change your thinking? Revise your story with more information.
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